Um, this could've really used another proofread. Nothing huge, but enough dropped punctuation or oddly placed punctuation and the lack of contractions really jerk me up when I'm reading this. The plot is really interesting (sweet and omgJaredinnasuit), so I was sort of sad I had to skim it to stop getting caught up with the little things. T_T
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Date: 2009-09-13 08:41 am (UTC)From: